Do You Like My Story? YA Supernatural/Romance (Vamps Included!)?

pretty good but it has a problem. TWI-LIGHT! Twilight takes people's minds. It's of course a very good book, but the problem is that's steph's style and it's impossible to write in any style but your own and the normal talk style is hardest. If you are a begginer and want to start with other's styles use Harry Potter, Narnia and Lord of the rings. Their style may seem hard but it attracts the reader even if it's badly done for the normal talk style is terrible when it isn't done properly. Your's is rather good, which tells me you've been poractising that style but to be honest I would reccomend taking the serious style up more and leaving the normal-talk style till you are sure you're capable of mastering it to the extreme.